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QuoteReplyTopic: Will this idea work? Posted: 07-Feb-2009 at 3:50am
Hey everyone, I was wondering if I could get some feedback on this new story that I'm thinking about writing. It's called "Mutant High". Details below.
Okay, this series takes place in an alternate universe where the ascension of mutants to as common as they were in the Morrison era happened a little differently. While a few mutants could be seen through-out history, the first generation that could actually be called a generation consisted of about 25 mutants. Five of these people found each other, and formed the superhero team, "The Mutants"! They were:
Charles Xavier aka X-Man Amelia Vought aka Vapor Erik Lensherr aka Magneto Ororo Munroe aka Storm Hank McCoy aka Beast
Years after they went their separate ways, Xavier brings them all back together to teach the next generation of mutants, which is very large after a mutant baby boom. As you were probably expecting, Magneto soon leaves when it becomes apparent that his views largely differ from the others'. But fret not, Because Xavier soon replaces him with his childhood friend, Moira MacTaggart, who brings with her her love Sean Cassidy, and his daughter.
Xavier also recruits a few other, younger teachers to his cause. They are:
Remy LeBeau aka Gambit Kate Pryde aka Shadowcat Cessily Kincaid aka Mercury Sam Guthrie aka Cannonball Warren Worthington aka Angel Jubilation Lee aka Jubilee
As the title suggests, the book mostly features the students, although I don't have a definite cast of kids just yet. But, basically, any X-character, from any era can show up here in teenage form.
So what do you think?
Edited by Laudo - 07-Feb-2009 at 10:21pm
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It could work, of course, why not. But I think the adventures of Xavier's original team, set in the 1950's or something would be faaaaaaar more intersting. You have a much more prejudiced society, civil-rights still a long way of, WW2 fresh in everybody's memmories, the cold-war heating up over those few mutants, maybe. That could have serious legs!
"Professor Xavier is a Jerk!" - Kitty
"I'm Dark! I'm Goth as Hell!" - Pixie
"Kurt who?" - Hope
"MONOLITH WAS RIGHT!!!!"
"Meet the New Boss, Same as the old Boss" - Pete Townsend
I agree with JanO in that the 50s team would be more interesting.
If your sole question is "Will this idea work?" I don't think anyone can answer that. If you'll allow me to answer "Can this idea work?" instead: Yes, it could.
Whether it works or not though depends on more than just your cast. School titles seem to be quite popular in fanfiction though, so you'll likely need some ideas that set yours apart from the others if you want people to have genuine enthusiasm when reading. At the moment the majority of your cast is not in roles we haven't seen before. We've seen Xavier, Beast and Storm as teachers in X-Men Evolution. We've seen Banshee as a teacher in Generation X. We've seen Iceman, Sunspot, Tabitha, Monet and Nightcrawler as students (some canonically, Iceman perhaps most notably in the movies and Nightcrawler perhaps most notably in Evolution). There is a surprise or two in there, the notion that Jubilee could be teaching a young Emma Frost, perhaps the most exciting one. So, yes it could work, if nothing else you could retread old ground with much of the cast, but I think most people would rather see something new like the team you suggested for Xavier's first group or Jubilee teaching Emma. We don't need more opportunities for Xavier/Storm/Angel to tell Iceman to behave or stop pulling pranks, we've seen that sort of thing.
Here's an idea, why not just mess around with everyone's ages? Have Xavier as the really young, powerful guy, but still keep him acting like he would grow up to be the Xavier we all know. Have Storm and Beast be among the younger students and have Jay Guthrie, eldest of the Guthrie clan, as headmaster. Now that is almost guaranteed to be a winner, at least in the originality stakes. Maybe call it 'The House that Jay Built'? Hmm, no need to work on the name.
Basically though, your cast and idea could 'work', it's mostly tried and tested. There's no argument about whether it could work. It could be a little more original though. Maybe focusing on the unusually placed characters as main characters could give it a feel much more different than the idea actually is. Mostly though it depends on your plot and writing style. You can get away with a tried and tested cast doing new things, or you can have an experimental cast doing the same old and get away with it. More likely though, if you fiddle with the casting you will have ideas come to you naturally - that's what I found.
First of all, thank you for the feedback, Grantrs.
Actually, some of what you said, I had already been planning on doing. In the 50s team, Xavier is the young, brash one, constantly challenging what Erik (the leader) says.
After reading your thoughts, I think I may mess with the ages a little more. The main idea was that Ali comes to the school, and finds an instant friend in Theresa and others. Over with the other group, it was mostly going to be about a Julian/Jennifer/Emma love triangle, and also the mystery of where Wanda and Pietro came from. Reading what you've said, though, I might change some of that (I doubt that it will be Jay running the school though).
Hmmm... I'll think about it and when I have a more definite cast, I'll put it up here.
Edit: So I've thought about it a little and here's my new cast:
I don't really know what to say now. I think those last changes to the cast have instantly transformed it into a much more interesting premise that I'm now actually excited to read, but have I forced your hand? Does anyone else agree with my suggestions? If I had to guess, I think most of us on this site will find that cast near irresistable. You've had some good ideas in there. I wouldn't have thought of putting Mystique and Leech in, at least I don't think I would.
Well, I'm interested in reading it now. Let's see if anyone else has been won over.
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